422| 28
|
七律•红子树(二) |
| ||
点评
描述红子树的生长环境与特征很到位,感觉“护”用的不准确,可否用“立”
| ||
点评
好联,但不知是秋风还是冬风
| ||
点评
好联,“世”好像夸大了,感觉用“岭”之类的词要好些
| ||
点评
尾句赞扬了红子树精神
| ||
| ||
| ||
| ||
| ||
| ||
| ||
| ||
| ||
| ||
| ||
| ||
| ||
| ||
| ||
| ||
| ||
| ||
| ||
| ||
|小黑屋|手机版|大中华诗词网
( 湘ICP备17006309号-1 )
GMT+8, 2025-8-9 05:03
Powered by Discuz! X3.4
Copyright © 2001-2021, Tencent Cloud.