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古风楹联初级班第八讲画组作业贴 |
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析联都还可以!对句2,欠点火候,乡心不改与后三有断层了!不改建议改成已动
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心灵沃土同学:析联不错;1联:没关联,2联可。
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析联不错。对句欠火候,
盼君还意有点散不如家还!前四也得炼下
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